Lisa: Have loved reading the chapters - they definitely draw you in and you want to know more about the characters. For me I want each chapter to be longer, but that may be just because the books I read generally have large chapters. But I like the style of writing.
Lynn: Quick easy to read chapters. I didn't find any spelling errors but maybe chapters were too simple. I enjoyed the description of Georgie waiting for her dad to come home.
John: The story flows very well and at a suitable pace, which is always desirable in order to hold the readers attention. However, I feel it would benefit from adding a physical description to each person in some way, slipping in little details that make it easier for the reader to picture them all. The same is also needed for the physical surroundings such as the cottage. A very good beginning Glo.
Tony: It’s not really my sort of book. However, I found myself wanting to read on from page to page and chapter to chapter.
Ann: I have to say to start with, that the subject matter is not the theme of a book that I would buy, so I hope you don't think I'm being too negative because I don't have experience of other books like this to compare with. I think that the chapters are too short and there was a lot of detailed conversation. Whole passages of "who said what to whom" and I found myself drifting a bit and losing the thread. I did find the characters likable and believable, so I was interested to see how they developed but not in the minute detail of their conversations between themselves.
Wendy: Either 'Mummy' or 'Mum' should be used - not both.Same with 'Daddy' or 'Dad. In that part of the country, the word 'living room' is used rather than 'lounge.' Ages of Alfie and Florrie need to be double checked. Beavers live near water so perhaps badgers wander through the garden. Either numbers or words should be used throughout - not both.